I tried to tell a (longer) short story this time. This is a first draft. If you have the time, I'd love your feedback, especially what I'm missing or places I'm not as effective as I could be. Thank you!
REVISED 11/14: Dancing Fool Second Draft
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Kathy, I hope we will get to read more stories about Benny and his adventures as an actor! You have created a story that captures Benny's anxieties and his transformation via a mysterious character, told through dance moves. Very clever. Have you considered more Benny and Connie stories? Good job!
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